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2014年
11月21日
22:01 コピットさん

英語日記、ネイティブに見てもらいました。

先日、親知らずを抜いたのですが、その時の話を英語日記に書きました。それを、英会話の先生に間違いを直していただいたきました。

まず、コピットの書いた英語日記から。

I had a terrible toothache yesterday.
I went to the dentist right away.
My doctor took an X-ray of my teeth and he said " According to the X-ray, everything seems all right. but
my wisdom tooth might be a cause of the pain.
So I took some pain killer and went home.

2 hours later, during dinner with my husband. the terrible pain came up again.
I was panic.

So I went to the dentist again and I had my wisdom tooth pull off .

I was so nervous while the doctor was pulling my tooth off but The anesthetic worked well I didn't feel pain.

After that the pain has gone away and I was relieved,
Luckly I had two days off so I was able to rest at home.

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ここからは先生の直してくれた文です。

Hi ○○!

I edited your diary entry. It was well written! I hope you're feeling better now, that pain sounds horrible!

Here it is:


I had a terrible toothache yesterday.
I went to the dentist right away.
The doctor took an X-ray of my teeth and said, "according to the X-ray, everything seems all right."

My wisdom tooth might be a cause of the pain, so I took some pain killers and went home.

2 hours later, during dinner with my husband, the terrible pain came up again.
I was in a panic.

So I went to the dentist again and I had my wisdom tooth pulled out .

I was so nervous while the doctor was pulling my tooth out, but the anesthetic worked well and I didn't feel pain.

After that, the pain has gone and I was relieved.
Luckily, I had two days off from work, so I was able to rest at home.
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2014年
11月24日
23:55
でぃさんさん

Hi, my friend Kopito

Thank you for your diary which shows the comparison of your original English writing with English-teacher-corrected one.
Your writing skill is excellent, a subtle mistake remain only.
Actually, I make a lot of mistake in my writing, but you kindly read my writing on your diary.
So, I'm willing to write some comment on your diary.
By the way, I hope you take care for your toothache.
Its pain is so terrible that anyone feel reluctant to do anything with it.
I do hope everything goes well in your life
Thanks a lot, I know you have much consideration for everyone.

Dei

2014年
11月25日
00:39
コピットさん

>>1 でぃさん

Thanks for your comment.^^

the pain after my tooth extraction has already healed.:D

I don't have much English ability, it takes me a long time to write dairy.

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